A good approach is to continually ask yourself: "Am I wasting the reader's time?" In your initial request, there are disjointed references that go nowhere and

A good approach is to continually ask yourself: "Am I wasting the reader's time?" In your initial request, there are disjointed references that go nowhere and don't actually form a coherent flow of thought towards an organized conclusion. You've mentioned the rambling nature of it yourself. So why not dig a bit deeper and ask yourself precisely what makes it so rambling?