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Those semicolons can be replaced with periods and negates your point. That's just a string of ideas, not really one logical sentence.

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• oblio 4y ago
  I haven't earnestly studied English grammar to the same level I've studied Romanian grammar. In Romanian you have "sentences" (noun - verb - etc) and "phrases" (multiple sentences together, basically they're separated only by periods). I think in English grammar "sentences" are called clauses? Anyway, Romanian "sentences" are generally short, and if they're not, for sure that's bad style. Romanian "phrases" can be long, but depending on the structure of the "sentences" and the logical separation between them, they can be quite clear. Maybe the same distinction makes sense here? "Sentences" (clauses?) should be relatively clear and short and somewhat independent, "phrases" can be long, but only if their individual components ("sentences") are of high quality on their own and if they're connected in clear ways.
• sseagull 4y ago
  Sort of. If you remove semicolons and use periods, you have to remove the ‘that’ as well. Then, to me, the sentence loses its impact. Theres a parallelism that is artistic, and makes everything flow. But in some sense this is art, not science; it shouldn’t be analyzed too much :)
  • denton-scratch 4y ago
    > But in some sense this is art, not science; it shouldn’t be analyzed too much :) I thought we were discussing law, not art. If legal drafting is to be compared with art, only art experts will gain.
    • sseagull 4y ago
      I suppose that's true. Got a little sidetracked there :) Agree when it comes to law - utility trumps art.