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This is so patronizing.

• Alupis 4y ago
  Constructive feedback is not patronizing. People need to be able to receive constructive feedback and improve, without feeling attacked. I did not detect snark, or superiority in this feedback comment. Instead, it seems to genuinely attempt to offer constructive feedback. The parent pointed out a specific fragment that needs re-work, which is an actionable item for the OP. Perhaps it could have been framed more positively, but constructing a place where people cannot offer direct, actionable feedback is quite unhelpful for all involved.
  • Enginerrrd 4y ago
    I'm mostly on your side, although the specific phrase "I want to read your work but..." [your opening sentence isn't good enough for me to grace your article with my superior writer eyeballs?] is perhaps problematic. Otherwise, I agree that it appears helpful and applicable.
• Geonode 4y ago
  No, throughout the article there are major hallmarks of underdeveloped English writing mastery, and overall the whole thing is a bit more florid than it is clear and to the point.
  • ausbah 4y ago
    the peak for me was the unaccompanied use of "serendipitously", don't want to be mr-anti-intellect but this was a slog