I think the metaphor works in a sense. The issue with your landing page is that it comes off as “designery” while at the same time not showing the polish that

I think the metaphor works in a sense. The issue with your landing page is that it comes off as “designery” while at the same time not showing the polish that an actual designer would produce. I can see that you’re trying, but it is clear that you don’t quite grasp what the intent of the design elements is supposed to be.