My first thoughts on the linked video are that a well written and followed script would improve it a lot, the flow of consciousness thought pattern in your spee

My first thoughts on the linked video are that a well written and followed script would improve it a lot, the flow of consciousness thought pattern in your speech makes it pretty hard to follow the concrete features and reasons for the product being worth using (lots of aa's and umm's, tripping over words, changing topics too quickly), it's definitely understandable as it's just a self-made video for HN but I found it pretty difficult to follow.