I think the sales page isn't bad. But it feels bland. - Your value add is probably not the elegant interface you're showing us. Sure, eye-candy is great, but t

I think the sales page isn't bad. But it feels bland. - Your value add is probably not the elegant interface you're showing us. Sure, eye-candy is great, but the features you outline below talk about "Anywhere Monitoring" and "Multi-Server Listening Support", etc. Maybe an image of a guy staring at his phone (anywhere) with lines going from his phone to your logo to his servers. Give people an "at-a-glance" of how your product works. - I'd draw more attention to your "Call to action". It let's me know immediately what you want me to do. Should I view the demo? Should I give you my cash? Maybe you want me to look at features? (You probably want my cash above all else. Why not show it?) - (This is super nit-picky, but...) Your copy reads in blocks. (Imagine Ben Stein doing a voice over for your website.) There's no visual rhythm on the page. Spend a few hours looking at other sales pages (Here's a good spot: http://startupli.st/startups http://startupli.st/startups) and look for patterns (ignoring, of course, all the cookie-cutter landing pages). -- The important parts of description text LEAP off the page at you. -- Very focused call-to-action. -- Strong images which relate their message. + This is a great start! You have the important parts of the page down. Now you just have to tweak it. (Even the best do this: http://37signals.com/svn/posts/3007-37signalscom-homepage-evolution http://37signals.com/svn/posts/3007-37signalscom-homepage-ev...)