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I like the script but you might want to tone it down at the start. I think it was good up until the christmas tree, and the wishing star was a little over the t
by whatshisface 5y ago
I like the script but you might want to tone it down at the start. I think it was good up until the christmas tree, and the wishing star was a little over the top. The emotions being expressed are clear already, and you don't need to translate it into symbolism for the audience to understand. :)
- lutzwutz 5y agoLutz / Co-writer here. Thanks for your feedback! I'm mostly to blame for the excessive use of symbolism as I'm personally a big fan of visual storytelling as opposed to focusing on dialogue to explain the set-up in a scene. But I agree with you, maybe it was a little too much considering the context was already set very early into the scene!