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Alternately, try reading All You Zombies by Robert A Heinlein http://www.polvoestelar.com.mx/babilonia/Libros/Robert%20A.%20Heinlein/Robert%20A.%20Heinlein%20-%

by Mordor 15y ago

Alternately, try reading All You Zombies by Robert A Heinlein http://www.polvoestelar.com.mx/babilonia/Libros/Robert%20A.%20Heinlein/Robert%20A.%20Heinlein%20-%20All%20You%20Zombies.pdf http://www.polvoestelar.com.mx/babilonia/Libros/Robert%20A.%...

sneak 15y ago
Thank you times a million for a Heinlein I'd never read! I thought I'd got them all. Isn't there another one like this involving a wizard who rules in a castle?
- jcarreiro 15y ago
  You may be thinking of "By His Bootstraps", which is a fantastic Heinlein short story about time travel. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/By_His_Bootstraps http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/By_His_Bootstraps
  - sneak 15y ago
    Indeed I am. Thanks! I love so much the effortlessness of steeping in a culture of people with such similar tastes and preferences enabled by the internet (and, to a lesser extent, HN).
    - sneak 15y ago
      PS: I meant (a culture of people with such similar tastes and preferences) enabled by the internet not a culture of people with (such similar tastes and preferences enabled by the internet)
IsaacL 15y ago
It's funny, I had a similar idea before reading either of these stories, and wrote my own version: http://i.saac.me/reincarnation.txt http://i.saac.me/reincarnation.txt I'd like to know what people think, since I haven't shown it to anyone before. I don't write fiction often and was experimenting with the writing style, and I'm not sure if it's too over-written.
- jackpirate 15y ago
  Overall, the story is verbose, and I think it would be much improved if you shortened it by 25-50%. In the beginning, you use too many pronouns ("he" or "him" is in nearly every sentence). I liked the juxtaposition of changing to she half way through. Maybe you could also add 1st and 2nd person narratives for more variety. Similarly, the first usage of sentence fragments was a good change of pacefrom the stilted introduction, but I think you started overusing it towards the end. If you replaced some of the narrative with dialog, you might solve these problems. But be careful not to get too close to the style of "the egg." Keep it up! I love fiction like this that tries to tackle deep topics.

by Mordor 15y ago

sneak 15y ago

Thank you times a million for a Heinlein I'd never read! I thought I'd got them all. Isn't there another one like this involving a wizard who rules in a castle?

jcarreiro 15y ago
You may be thinking of "By His Bootstraps", which is a fantastic Heinlein short story about time travel. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/By_His_Bootstraps http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/By_His_Bootstraps
- sneak 15y ago
  Indeed I am. Thanks! I love so much the effortlessness of steeping in a culture of people with such similar tastes and preferences enabled by the internet (and, to a lesser extent, HN).
  - sneak 15y ago
    PS: I meant (a culture of people with such similar tastes and preferences) enabled by the internet not a culture of people with (such similar tastes and preferences enabled by the internet)

IsaacL 15y ago

It's funny, I had a similar idea before reading either of these stories, and wrote my own version: http://i.saac.me/reincarnation.txt http://i.saac.me/reincarnation.txt I'd like to know what people think, since I haven't shown it to anyone before. I don't write fiction often and was experimenting with the writing style, and I'm not sure if it's too over-written.

jackpirate 15y ago
Overall, the story is verbose, and I think it would be much improved if you shortened it by 25-50%. In the beginning, you use too many pronouns ("he" or "him" is in nearly every sentence). I liked the juxtaposition of changing to she half way through. Maybe you could also add 1st and 2nd person narratives for more variety. Similarly, the first usage of sentence fragments was a good change of pacefrom the stilted introduction, but I think you started overusing it towards the end. If you replaced some of the narrative with dialog, you might solve these problems. But be careful not to get too close to the style of "the egg." Keep it up! I love fiction like this that tries to tackle deep topics.