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Overall, it's enjoyable. Sometimes your wording can be a little awkward. Keep it up.
by michaeldhopkins 15y ago
Overall, it's enjoyable. Sometimes your wording can be a little awkward. Keep it up.
- manuscreationis 15y agoPoint well taken - That's really just my style, I suppose. I wrote it to reflect how I would tell the story if I were directly talking to someone. I'll try to be on the lookout for anything that looks too over-done in the future. Thanks for reading!