I actually think this one is way better than the first. It's a little too wordy and breezy for me, but it does speak to your identity as an organization and pro

I actually think this one is way better than the first. It's a little too wordy and breezy for me, but it does speak to your identity as an organization and provides insight into the environment a candidate would be entering. 1. Agree with others cutting out phrases like "chills", "badass","haha just kidding" 2. Typo: "sleek and crips UI design" --> crisp 3. As a general rule, less is more. So as an exercise, ask yourself what you would write if you had to eliminate 50% of the text in this post. What about 75%?