Yeah, don't mind the haters. I haven't read the copy from your page - just from the op, it does look lame. But that's fine. Work on it, make it specific, and pi

Yeah, don't mind the haters. I haven't read the copy from your page - just from the op, it does look lame. But that's fine. Work on it, make it specific, and pitch concrete benefits. If you product involves education (new model, etc.), you should be pitching to everyone, counting the mean-time-to-understanding, and relentlessly honing it downwards.