Agreed. Writing is very hard. This is simple and repetitive in style. It is a writing style I would expect from fast paced. I came to see this as a warning sign

Agreed. Writing is very hard. This is simple and repetitive in style. It is a writing style I would expect from fast paced. I came to see this as a warning sign. Didn't get through the sample and stopped reading. On the other hand I haven't written a novel. Keep up your work.