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Interesting idea. It took me a moment to realize the incentive here (note: I didn't care enough up front to read the text as there's "a lot" of it) -- perhaps
by aik 15y ago
Interesting idea. It took me a moment to realize the incentive here (note: I didn't care enough up front to read the text as there's "a lot" of it) -- perhaps the idea of offering something special should be made more visible. Maybe you could break it down as simply as possible. Something like:
Provide a special incentive/offer and receive your first customer!
Why should YOU be my first customer? Because of this special offer...!
- abrimo 15y agoThanks - those are some good points. I've just added some more text in bullet form that hopefully explains it a bit better.
- yhlasx 15y agoPartially agree, less text is [almost] always better. Pay more attention to customer side. Use sharp expressions avoiding classic ones. By classic, i imply expressions like "Special offer". They seem unappealing and remind of spam. Never tell people to do something (like "you should"). It is irritating for customers (Personally, I hate it). [Update] Forgot to write, i think you really should work on the design.