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Look, no offence, but this is a terrible poem. It's verbose: > We, the successors of a country and a time where a skinny Black girl descended from slaves and

• UncleOxidant 6y ago
  Was gonna try to refute you... but I can't even. It's poetry. Most of us loved it. Especially her delivery of it.
  • dash2 6y ago
    Mmm. Consider it possible that I'm right? Not everything that sounds good stands up in the cold harsh light of criticism. Or as a great poet once put it (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m6hzkBihaew https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m6hzkBihaew): "Do you remember Rick Astley? He had a big fat hit, it was ghastly." Update: heh, my fastest-downvoted comment. Yup, I'm definitely right.
    • UncleOxidant 6y ago
      No, it's not that you're "right". It's that your techbro-ism is showing. Not a good look.
      • dash2 6y ago
        I'm not sure what techbro-ism means. I don't work in tech. Do you mean that as a man, I ought not to criticize a black woman's poetry? I don't accept that.
        • UncleOxidant 6y ago
          The phrase "on the spectrum" comes to mind.
          • TeaDrunk 6y ago
            It's inappropriate to make a pass at autism as the reason why the person may be responding in a manner one disagrees with towards a piece of art. For one thing, autistic poets and authors exist and can exist successfully, often with their neurodiversity actively enriching their art. (Especially given the poet in question has a disability herself, I am criticizing the assuming a disability as a way to to criticize someone's response to art.)
      • dang 6y ago
        You've repeatedly broken the site guidelines in this thread by calling names, among other things. That's not cool—not in this comment, nor in https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=25862065 https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=25862065, nor in https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=25862047 https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=25862047. We ban accounts that post repeatedly like that. Fortunately, your comment history doesn't have much of it (in fact, I didn't see any other cases when I skimmed back a ways) and contains many good comments. Please stick to that kind of comment and drop this kind. The commons is vulnerable and fragile and we need everyone to help protect it.
    • MikeTheGreat 6y ago
      > I'm definitely right. That's really not how that works, kinda like how pirates don't prevent global warming [1] [1] https://www.datasciencecentral.com/profiles/blogs/hilarious-graphs-and-pirates-prove-that-correlation-is-not https://www.datasciencecentral.com/profiles/blogs/hilarious-...
    • krapp 6y ago
      You can't be "right", much less "definitely right" about a subjective opinion on the quality of an artistic work. That's just, like, your opinion dash2.
      • dash2 6y ago
        Oh, woah, just cool it krapp! Your last tape wasn't such hot stuff! Seriously, sure, this isn't like a maths problem. But we can have reasoned opinions about art, just as we can have reasoned opinions about whether, say, a piece of software is well or badly written, given that it does what it's technically supposed to. I'm not just saying it's bad because it gave me a nasty feeling in my tummy. In particular, poetry and art contain ideas. They express ideas powerfully and viscerally. It matters whether we have good or bad ideas, thinking or hot air, new understanding or stale clichés. In this sense, art isn't just like a bag of cheetos. It has consequences. That's why dictatorships have often censored good art, and supported bad art. Good art can express new thoughts. I think the US will need a lot of new thoughts in the next four years.
• war1025 6y ago
  "Art makes you think. Propaganda tells you what to think"
• alistoriv 6y ago
  You're right. Reading this text without having heard it, it reads like a speech. The only thing that gives it the poetry sheen is the same tired slam poetry delivery that you can't escape now.
  • dash2 6y ago
    I never saw the delivery and it may have been awesome. (There were a couple of good lines that I can imagine sounding great - "It’s because being American is more than a pride we inherit./It’s the past we step into and how we repair it." Punchy, to the point, and a nice, surprising rhyme.) Speech can change things. I once heard a brilliant reading of someone's translations of Mickiewicz (Poland's national poet). I bought the book and it was disappointing how the stuff didn't stand up on the page. Really good work - at least in poetry - should be able to cope with being read as well as being listened to.
    • fullstop 6y ago
      If you have 5 minutes, watch it. There's no need to imagine here.
• TeaDrunk 6y ago
  Paul Beatty's essay was actually about his inability to appreciate Maya Angelou, and subsequently his inability to appreciate Black literature the way it's been framed in the white educational system. "My journey to black literary insobriety isn't so different from how I came to appreciate free jazz after growing up in a house that contained two records, the soundtrack to "Enter the Dragon" and "Rufus Featuring Chaka Khan." It turns out that I enjoy never fully understanding what's in front of me, and I masochistically relish being offended while thinking about why I feel offended and if I should feel offended. I also live in Manhattan's East Village."
  • dash2 6y ago
    Maybe so (I can't access the NYT article right now) but here's a quote from elsewhere: “I made it through the first couple of pages or so before a strong sense of doom overwhelmed me and I began to get very suspicious. I ventured another paragraph, growing ever-more oppressed with each maudlin passage. My lips thickened … For a black child like myself who was impoverished every other week while waiting for his mother’s bimonthly paydays, giving me a copy of that book was the educational equivalent of giving the prairie Indians blankets laced with smallpox or putting saltpeter in a sailor’s soup.”
• eachro 6y ago
  What I find fascinating is how people so often have this impulse to tear down things that others hold in high regard. Impulse might even be an understatement - it's almost a need. I wonder why that is. Ex: - "vim sucks! why don't people use emacs instead?" - "katy perry's music sucks!" Everyone is entitled to their own opinion. Many liked it. Many did not - yourself included. That's okay. Art does not evoke the same response from everyone and we should not expect it to.
  • dash2 6y ago
    It's fine for people to disagree, sure, and I certainly don't expect to convince everyone. You're also absolutely right that disagreements can engage the emotions in the way you describe. But consider your example, software. People have strong emotions about, say, Windows vs. Mac vs. Linux as a platform. This isn't just about the feels. Real issues are at stake. The Unix-hater's handbook points out how "root" was a terrible security model. Similar comments might apply to Windows. Well, I think art matters too. There's no bright line between "art" and the other ways people have of expressing ideas (political speeches, say). If our art is clichéd, it means our ideas are clichéd. At worst, it means we are hiding from reality in a bubble of uplift and togetherness. At present (in my view as an outsider) Americans really need to come together as a nation - but that will require more than repeating the clichés of one's own political tribe. So in that sense, I think this poem is a bad omen.
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  • burnthrow 6y ago
    I think people are tired of the same politically-motivated dog and pony show every time inventing a new totem. Like WaPo/NYT-fabricated "pop icon" Ruth Bader Ginsberg last year. It's the same chorus of vapid praise each time, neatly confined to a news cycle.
  • newfromblammo 6y ago
    There is a contradiction in what you’re saying here. Everyone is entitled to their opinion unless it is a critical opinion. The comment gives sound reasons for not liking the poem, it does not resort to the kind of cheap shots you describe. (Which by the way don’t really qualify as criticism) Without critical perspective there would be no such thing as great art. We need more critical thinking, not less.
• antiterra 6y ago
  Your claim about successor fails, because, even ignoring the variance of meaning of the word successor, ‘of a country’ can simply be the implication that you are part of that country. The union being forged with purpose seems more about there being a purpose instilled in the union and also ‘purpose’ as the raw material being forged. The part you call cliché is perhaps not that deep, but fits within the expected patriotic idealism the poem invokes. It’s also good sonically. The ‘cheap effect’ is just more concentrated youthful idealism, of the sort encoded in our founding documents and pledges.
• williamaadams 6y ago
  And yet, without any analysis, anyone I've talked to was moved by the poem, and thought it was the best part of the inauguration. I think the moment, the black young girl standing at the pulpit of power, the collective relief, the joy of seeing a female (black/asian) as VP, culminated in an emotional uplifting, which the words did not capture at 100%. It had meaning in the context of 4 years of trump, of 400 years of oppression, of a summer of outcry for justice. Reading later will leave you flat I think. I thought it was perfect for the moment.
  • dash2 6y ago
    I can believe that too :-)
• devchix 6y ago
  I'm with you. I saw the delivery, and at the time thought it so much easy bromide, soporific treacle. It's even worse now seeing the words on a page. I have an innate distrust of 22-year-old poets. What do they know of pain, loss, irrevocable breaking of things, and the compounding interests of their tolls over a longer span of life. Pretty sentiments, the simiplistic rhymes, and I could not even find a meter. Yesterday I was thinking of W. S. Merwin. " ... it was then that you saw him in his own exile and you paid for him and kept him until he could fly again and you let him go but then where could he go in the world of your time with its wars everywhere and the soldiers hungry the fires lit the knives out twelve hundred years ago."
• dragonwriter 6y ago
  Look, no offenses, but that's terrible and shallow criticism: > You can't be the successor of a country, The we to whom it is addressed constitute a country, and can certainly be collectively successors to the past state of that country > you even more can't be the successor of the present instant happening right now But the time it referenced began in the (close, but still) past from the time it was recited, and the emphasis on that as already a past that we are already successors to when we contemplate it fits quite well with the theme of continuous progress of the poem. > It's content-free, like a bad political speech. "We are striving to forge our union with purpose." As opposed to striving to forge it accidentally? No, striving for common direction instead of perfection (though putting it that way in a poem would be inexcusable); you need to stop reading sentences alone out of context: “...that doesn’t mean we are striving to form a union that is perfect. We are striving to forge our union with purpose.” > It's clichéd: "We close the divide because we know to put our future first, we must first put our differences aside.... while we have our eyes on the future, history has its eyes on us." That’s a fairly specific reference, not cliché. > It uses rhyme for cheap effect: "We seek harm to none and harmony for all." That's...not using rhyme for cheap effect. > It is a shame, when there are black poets like Derek Walcott out there Kind of an odd alternative to hold out to a US inaugural poet, as Walcott is, while certainly Black (as now an absolute majority of such poets have been) both not-American and dead. > I expected something as bad as Maya Angelou Pretty much all the negative criticism of “On the Pulse of Morning" is of it as a decontextualized text, rather than in its actual role. And it take someone taking the same approach to Gorman’s work and blindly expecting everyone else to do the same to even begin to think the sentence the phrase “as bad as Maya Angelou” is something that could even sensibly be used, non-ironically, in this context. > brutally reviewed by Paul Beatty That isn't a review, of a throw away statement of distaste for a work. Which isn't the same thing. > People get exposed to this kind of "uplifting" stuff and will think that's all there is. While it is certainly not a requirement for poetry to be either targeted at a broad audience or uplifting, any art has a context and intended audience, and inaugural poetry is a pretty specialized niche where both breadth of appeal and uplifting character are, usually, things that makes sense. Having more depth than just that is, of courses, to be hoped for, but Gorman’s piece did.
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• davidivadavid 6y ago
  I'm glad people enjoyed it. I couldn't get past the sophomoric avalanche of cheap alliterations.