I don't want to be overtly negative here, but this document is a philosophical terror. I recognize that you wrote it out of inspiration and tried to encapsulat

I don't want to be overtly negative here, but this document is a philosophical terror. I recognize that you wrote it out of inspiration and tried to encapsulate it to an abbreviated timeframe, but where you seem to want to espouse productivity and forward thinking, you have instead illustrated what I would describe as, at best, a destructive and dishonest personality.