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Steps to Improve Your Writing

190 points by adamfaliq 6y ago

sieste 6y ago
> “Regular patterns of drought and precipitation have been found to coincide with cycles of sunspot activity” > which can be simplified to: > “Regular patterns of drought and precipitation coincide with cycles of sunspot activity” > Not only the phrase “have been found” adds nothing to the prose, it also does not state the subject. Removing the phrase will make the prose above more concise. This, and by leaving out the weasly "have been found" you take ownership of the statement, which forces you to be more careful and critical when citing other people's results.
- adamfaliq 6y ago
  OP here. Taking ownership of the statement is an interesting perspective. I've never thought of that. In my experience, when I take ownership, my writing tends to feel more honest. I acknowledge what I know or don't know, which makes the writing clearer for the readers.
- throwaway_pdp09 6y ago
  I'm a little cautious of that. “have been found” implies a correlation but reserves some doubt; to omit it is to say the correlation is extremely strong, effectively beyond doubt. That's a strong implication. To leave that quaifier phrase in suggests the author recognises the signal is noisy and some other experts may disagree about the correlation being present. Anyway, I really appreciate this kind of thing. There's too much bullshit writing and I'm glad someone is pushing back. (Edited for clarity)
- keiferski 6y ago
  That's not how science works. "Have been found" is not a weasel phrase, it's an accurate description of empirical observations.
  - BigJ1211 6y ago
    It also implies you weren't the one to find it and are you relaying that information to the reader.
  - kd5bjo 6y ago
    It is a weasel phrase: It gets you out of citing your source for the information, which deprives the reader of judging its accuracy for themselves. I'd probably write it this way: "Jones (2018) showed that regular patterns of drought and precipitation coincide with cycles of sunspot activity."
wombatmobile 6y ago
This is clear writing? 2. Because we know nothing about the local conditions, we could not determine how effectively the committee had allocated funds to areas that need the most assistance. We can't tell if the committee spent wisely because we don't know our way around here.
- ACow_Adonis 6y ago
  The later is hardly clear writing. I think you've mistaken terseness and informality for clarity. You misconstrue "wise spending" with "allocating funds to areas that need the most assistance". The two are not informationally equivalent. You leave out the information that you know nothing about local conditions. Presumably you've jumped to conclusions about what local conditions means. And lastly, it must be pointed out that a perfectly valid interpretation of your version is that you were unable to form an opinion on the committees spending because you got lost in the carpark/ building/town... I think one could arguably simplify the original further to: "Knowing nothing about local conditions, we could not determine how effectively the committee allocated funds to areas needing the most assistance." But it's very hard to move past that without fundamental information changing, and even my changes I accept are a little bit stylistically subjective, albeit with a marginally lower word count to convey fundamentally the same information.
- Veen 6y ago
  Your version shows the problem with taking advice to "omit needless words" too far. The main virtue of good writing is clarity, and that often needs more words than a maximally compressed sentence. Your version omits useful information, is imprecise, and uses a vague idiom that is easily misinterpreted. In short, it doesn't say the same thing.
- rezendi 6y ago
  The first example smacks of writing which is not so much unclear as it is deliberately banal and devoid of impact, as famously described by Orwell here: https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/ https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_poli...
puzzledobserver 6y ago
To me, the hardest part of writing is getting the first draft done. I'm a good enough self critic to do a reasonable job of editing, but the writer's block is real and awful. The standard advice is to silence the internal critic and write. Of course, it's easier said than done. I'm supposed to be writing a paper. I'm commenting on HN instead.
- KarimDaghari 6y ago
  In my experience it’s got more to do with expectations. https://karimdaghari.netlify.app/blog/get-things-done/ https://karimdaghari.netlify.app/blog/get-things-done/
- 3pt14159 6y ago
  Start with a mind map. If the goal of your writing is clear, it's easy to make an outline once the mind map is done. If the goal isn't clear, start asking questions about why it isn't clear and expand the mind map until there's enough there to continue. Sometimes this requires research while constructing the mind map, especially for assigned academic writing. Tag pages with sticky notes or copy data with references into a large research doc as you go. Once the outline is done, the rest is straightforward. An editor always helps if you can afford one, but you don't always need to agree with the suggested changes.
- telesilla 6y ago
  I always think about the reader: what do I want them to learn or understand? Then, how can I best get there without losing their attention, and, if context allows, make it entertaining.
jmkd 6y ago
Some good tips, but I read the section on nominalisation three times and I can't for the life of me tell you what nominalisation means or how to apply it (or not). However, it piqued my interest in the concept, and this article helped me get a little closer: https://unilearning.uow.edu.au/academic/3b.html https://unilearning.uow.edu.au/academic/3b.html
- Veen 6y ago
  Pinker writes a useful explanation: > A process called nominalization takes a perfectly spry verb and embalms it into a lifeless noun by adding a suffix like –ance, –ment, or –ation. Instead of affirming an idea, you effect its affirmation; rather than postponing something, you implement a postponement. Helen Sword calls them "zombie nouns" because they lumber across the scene without a conscious agent directing their motion.[0] There is a lot more detail in his book "Sense of Style: The Thinking Person's Guide to Writing in the 21st Century" [0]: https://stevenpinker.com/files/pinker/files/why_academics_stink_at_writing.pdf https://stevenpinker.com/files/pinker/files/why_academics_st...
  - jmkd 6y ago
    Thanks!
meerita 6y ago
As a non native english-speaker, my struggles in my original language is finishing sentences early instead doing long ones. Sometimes I write long phrases, full of commas, semicolons, etc. I found that in enlish people tend to be more conservative when writing sentences.
- RMPR 6y ago
  This is also the case in my native language (French), I assume it's pretty common for Latin languages.
  - ethanbond 6y ago
    I only speak English but share this hypothesis based on reading translated novels from Latin language writers. Jose Saramago (Portuguese) is a striking example. Beautiful stuff but characteristically different from how native English speakers structure things.
  - meerita 6y ago
    I have troubles, I guess, to know exactly when to period or comman depending on the sound of the pause. To me it is like everything is short paused, so everything will be a comma :D
- geocrasher 6y ago
  Native English speaker here. For me, any sentence with more than one comma is telling me that it's not one sentence. It's two, three, or four sentences. And to be clear, I'm talking about sentences that are very long, not sentences that contain a list of items such as the previous sentence. Example: ----------------------------------------------------------- The more I write, the more I realize that sentence structure matters, as does grammar, and even spelling, and also choice of words, which affects some readers for whom English is a non-primary language. As I write more, I realize that sentence structure, grammar, and spelling matter. My choice of words is important because unnecessary complexity may negatively affect some readers. ----------------------------------------------------------- It wasn't always this way. 50 years ago, it was common for sentences to be much longer. I often read stories to my wife that were written in the 50's, 60's, and 70's. They are personal accounts, not professional writing. Life stories. They quite often include sentences that take more than one breath to read aloud, because they are so incredibly long that they deplete me of oxygen before I can finish reading the sentence, which I do find quite difficult to read since I am now concentrating on my breathing instead of on the written word, which is not just awkward but also distracting. YMMV.
Thorentis 6y ago
> Looking back, I always struggle with writing. Shouldn't it be "struggled"? (Sorry, I had to.)
- torh 6y ago
  > I can bear the pain of writing in high school, but I almost gave up in university And this should be "could"?
  - adamfaliq 6y ago
    Fixed it :)
    - mohamez 6y ago
      As a non-native English speaker, your blog post and your interactions and feedback to replies and suggestions to fix some "mistakes" on your blog post is an inspiration for me, because I've always struggled to start writing fearing that I'll make "banal" and "obvious" mistakes that will decrease my credibility on the subject I'm writing about.
- SagelyGuru 6y ago
  "The principle suggests us to focus..." Should not it be: "The principle suggests that we focus..."?
MaxBarraclough 6y ago
Readers might also enjoy You Might as Well Be a Great Copy Editor. https://blog.regehr.org/archives/1471 https://blog.regehr.org/archives/1471 Discussed 4 months ago: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=23631027 https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=23631027
adamfaliq 6y ago
Hi everyone, OP here. Writing has always been a struggle for me. I just started to post consistently on this blog two weeks ago. Didn't expect this to get to the front page of HN. I hope you guys find it helpful. I'd appreciate any feedback or comment on the post! P.S: Fixed all the grammatical errors in the post.
- probablypower 6y ago
  Hey Adam, the content itself is great and the tips are bang on. However, I think you should proof read the article again. An article on 'Improving Your Writing' loses a lot of credibility when it has sentences like: > The character, 'hotel' has does an action 'wanted'. which should be: > The character, 'hotel', has an action, 'wanted'. It also seems like you rely on a single source, Williams and Colomb (1990). Is this your personal summary of that book? Do you recommend reading it, or do you believe your post captures the most important points?
  - adamfaliq 6y ago
    Hi there, 1. Fixed the mistake :) 2. Yes, totally recommend it. I've read a few books on writing and I think this is the best so far. The way the authors discuss the mechanics of writing is refreshing. It'll give you a good framework not just to write, but also to think. 3. This post encapsulates what I learned from the book and my experience to improve my writing skill.
- MrPowers 6y ago
  Thanks for making the post. Focusing on creating a clear thesis at the start of your blog will help your readers understand the purpose of your post. The first paragraph communicates you've struggled with writing in the past, the second para says writing advice is often low quality, and the third paragraph explains the characteristics of good writing (hints at the thesis). You could make a single thesis like this: "This post explains the characteristics of good writing and how I was able to improve my writing skills." You could continue with "learning to write well was a great personal struggle, especially because writing training materials didn't help". That could also be considered a separate thesis for a different post. Paragraphs like these can be made more concise: > Most writers struggle to write well when the subjects use technical terms. Technical terms are confusing when they are not introduced properly. This technique is helpful when communicating complex information that requires technical terms. When you introduce complex information, design the sentence that it appears in, so that you can locate that term at the end. Here's how you could reword it: Technical writing is difficult, especially when the terminology is not properly introduced. It's best to introduce technical terms at the end of sentences.
DrBazza 6y ago
Definitely these two: 1. Good writing is clear 4. Good writing is concise Use a simple, reduced vocabulary, as your readers are likely to have English as a second language (e.g. https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/world-44569277 https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/world-44569277). And as Richard Feynman pointed out, try explaining it to a child. If you can't go back and rewrite it. Don't use (modern) slang, and avoid writing 'conversational' English. It's "lessons" not "learnings". How much have you eaten? How many eatings have you had? Ugh. Don't use 'ping' or 'reach out' (you're not the Four Tops). And what on earth is "welp/whelp" that people have started using in the last couple of years? It's "well, for one thing..."
- rimliu 6y ago
  English is my fourth language. I hate seeing advice like "use simple, reduced vocabulary". Dumbing everything down is not a way to go. Feynman said, that if you cannot explaind it to a child you do not understand it, not that you should communicate with everyone like they were kids.
  - DrBazza 6y ago
    > Feynman said, that if you cannot explaind it to a child you do not understand it, not that you should communicate with everyone like they were kids. That's not what I said, there was a full stop, not a comma. I was applying Feynman's idea to writing, if you can't explain something simply in plain English, you really should rewrite it to reach a wider audience. > I hate seeing advice like "use simple, reduced vocabulary". Sure, and if articles are written 'normally', for people with English as a second language, that means that they will learn more English words when they encounter new ones. However "I" is one person, and an author wants to reach the widest audience, with the lowest common denominator. I don't understand much German or French, for example, but an article written in simple German or French is much more accessible to me (the lowest common denominator). Writing is about reaching all of your audience.
    - buran77 6y ago
      I think it boils down to "don't use a five dollar word when a fifty cent word will do". It's not a matter of always using simple language, sometimes that doesn't cut it. Some concepts can't be broken down to the simplest words and still keep the quality of the conversation, the precision, the density of information. I think it's just better to keep language as simple as it can be, as simple as the topic dictates. Don't complicate it just for the sake of sounding smart if the discussion doesn't require it.
geocrasher 6y ago
I've been writing for several years, and the more I blog, write training materials, or just write to customers, three things keep helping me improve: 1) Less is more. A) Write all you like, and then cut out all the stuff that doesn't matter. Like the way you just said the same thing 3 times in a row. B) The less you say the less someone has to argue with. The opposite is also true C) Stick to main points and save gory details for later, unless you're in the "Gory Details" section already. 2) Read your writing out loud. What looks great on the page might sound terrible aloud. If it sounds terrible aloud, then it'll be awkward for others to read, too. 3) Just write. Get the words onto the page. This is the hardest but most important thing. Don't pay attention to form, redundancy, spelling, grammar, or redundancy. Just get the words down. These so-called brain dumps will help you get expressive. Then you can edit the heck out of yourself as mentioned in 1 and 2. 4) Okay, a fourth. No matter what you write, read Steven King's "On Writing" to find out what it means to "kill your darlings". Epic book.
- martin-adams 6y ago
  I use the text to speech in my articles as a 'read it out loud' exercise.
  - tartoran 6y ago
    I do too and it truly makes a difference. When I read something out loud im still biased as my own voice somehow matches with my internal voice I hear when I'm silent reading. When it's read out loud with a different voice it registers completely differently.
- farleykr 6y ago
  In regards to point 2: Having kids and reading tons of books out loud to them has really impressed upon me how important this is. Reading my own writing out loud has been a real turning point for me in developing my writing skills.
- tartoran 6y ago
  Thanks for sharing these observations. Im not much of a writer but would love to improve on my writing skills. I personally have the most problem with 3 and the only way I could get more productive brain dumps is to record myself talking freely instead, then rewrite it. But this is a time consuming process and was wondering what kind of exercises/drills I could use to ease the brain dump constipation. To me there's something that blocks me when I attempt to write something down freely but I feel that that the right exercises would ease it. I feel like Im making a wrong step somewhere that makes me become self conscious at the wrong moment.
hestefisk 6y ago
Good post. There is one important topic not touched upon yet: clear structure. Without a strong organising structure and logic, it’s hard to navigate, especially for non-prose. I can highly recommend the book “The pyramid principle” as a way to really improve structured writing.
jungletime 6y ago
I love youtube, but so many videos would be improved if a little writing was done before hand, and then the video edited to a script. This is a good essay by Orwell, that's related. "Politics and the English Language" https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/ https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_poli...
mariodiana 6y ago
Regarding rule two, cohesion, I remember being struck by the writing in this New Yorker piece from 2011 on the subject of Rwandan bicycle racers. This goes beyond good writing. The writer didn't merely begin his sentences with what he had just said or with what he could count on being familiar to the reader. I noticed that the writer would take a paragraph and somehow manage to raise a question in my mind, and then in the next paragraph he would answer that question. This happened over and over. Give it a read! https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2011/07/11/climbers-philip-gourevitch https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2011/07/11/climbers-phili...
Daub 6y ago
From the article title: "How to Write Well...". Surely instead "How to Write Effectively..."? Aside from that, I understand the OP’s pain in learning how to write. My initiation by fire in the craft of writing was when I supervised my first PhD. It was like like the labours of Sisyphus. One principle I can add to the list of principles that is evolving here, if you think your book/thesis is finished, it probably isn’t. That is why God gave us Editors. Notice I have capitalized both God and Editors.
randcraw 6y ago
> A story has two components – characters and actions. Three components... the third is A POINT. Unless the path of the story's narrative promises to lead somewhere, the reader loses interest and stops reading.
jzer0cool 6y ago
Quick Summary: * Good writing tells a story. Use characters and actions. * String together cohesive prose using consistent topic strings at the beginning of a sentence. * Put emphasis of new ideas at the end of the sentence. * Be concise and with fewer words. Unnecessary to state with reader can infer.

190 points by adamfaliq 6y ago

> “Regular patterns of drought and precipitation have been found to coincide with cycles of sunspot activity” > which can be simplified to: > “Regular patterns of drought and precipitation coincide with cycles of sunspot activity” > Not only the phrase “have been found” adds nothing to the prose, it also does not state the subject. Removing the phrase will make the prose above more concise. This, and by leaving out the weasly "have been found" you take ownership of the statement, which forces you to be more careful and critical when citing other people's results.

adamfaliq 6y ago
OP here. Taking ownership of the statement is an interesting perspective. I've never thought of that. In my experience, when I take ownership, my writing tends to feel more honest. I acknowledge what I know or don't know, which makes the writing clearer for the readers.
throwaway_pdp09 6y ago
I'm a little cautious of that. “have been found” implies a correlation but reserves some doubt; to omit it is to say the correlation is extremely strong, effectively beyond doubt. That's a strong implication. To leave that quaifier phrase in suggests the author recognises the signal is noisy and some other experts may disagree about the correlation being present. Anyway, I really appreciate this kind of thing. There's too much bullshit writing and I'm glad someone is pushing back. (Edited for clarity)
keiferski 6y ago
That's not how science works. "Have been found" is not a weasel phrase, it's an accurate description of empirical observations.
- BigJ1211 6y ago
  It also implies you weren't the one to find it and are you relaying that information to the reader.
- kd5bjo 6y ago
  It is a weasel phrase: It gets you out of citing your source for the information, which deprives the reader of judging its accuracy for themselves. I'd probably write it this way: "Jones (2018) showed that regular patterns of drought and precipitation coincide with cycles of sunspot activity."

wombatmobile 6y ago

This is clear writing? 2. Because we know nothing about the local conditions, we could not determine how effectively the committee had allocated funds to areas that need the most assistance. We can't tell if the committee spent wisely because we don't know our way around here.

ACow_Adonis 6y ago
The later is hardly clear writing. I think you've mistaken terseness and informality for clarity. You misconstrue "wise spending" with "allocating funds to areas that need the most assistance". The two are not informationally equivalent. You leave out the information that you know nothing about local conditions. Presumably you've jumped to conclusions about what local conditions means. And lastly, it must be pointed out that a perfectly valid interpretation of your version is that you were unable to form an opinion on the committees spending because you got lost in the carpark/ building/town... I think one could arguably simplify the original further to: "Knowing nothing about local conditions, we could not determine how effectively the committee allocated funds to areas needing the most assistance." But it's very hard to move past that without fundamental information changing, and even my changes I accept are a little bit stylistically subjective, albeit with a marginally lower word count to convey fundamentally the same information.
Veen 6y ago
Your version shows the problem with taking advice to "omit needless words" too far. The main virtue of good writing is clarity, and that often needs more words than a maximally compressed sentence. Your version omits useful information, is imprecise, and uses a vague idiom that is easily misinterpreted. In short, it doesn't say the same thing.
rezendi 6y ago
The first example smacks of writing which is not so much unclear as it is deliberately banal and devoid of impact, as famously described by Orwell here: https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/ https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_poli...

puzzledobserver 6y ago

To me, the hardest part of writing is getting the first draft done. I'm a good enough self critic to do a reasonable job of editing, but the writer's block is real and awful. The standard advice is to silence the internal critic and write. Of course, it's easier said than done. I'm supposed to be writing a paper. I'm commenting on HN instead.

KarimDaghari 6y ago
In my experience it’s got more to do with expectations. https://karimdaghari.netlify.app/blog/get-things-done/ https://karimdaghari.netlify.app/blog/get-things-done/
3pt14159 6y ago
Start with a mind map. If the goal of your writing is clear, it's easy to make an outline once the mind map is done. If the goal isn't clear, start asking questions about why it isn't clear and expand the mind map until there's enough there to continue. Sometimes this requires research while constructing the mind map, especially for assigned academic writing. Tag pages with sticky notes or copy data with references into a large research doc as you go. Once the outline is done, the rest is straightforward. An editor always helps if you can afford one, but you don't always need to agree with the suggested changes.
telesilla 6y ago
I always think about the reader: what do I want them to learn or understand? Then, how can I best get there without losing their attention, and, if context allows, make it entertaining.

jmkd 6y ago

Some good tips, but I read the section on nominalisation three times and I can't for the life of me tell you what nominalisation means or how to apply it (or not). However, it piqued my interest in the concept, and this article helped me get a little closer: https://unilearning.uow.edu.au/academic/3b.html https://unilearning.uow.edu.au/academic/3b.html

Veen 6y ago
Pinker writes a useful explanation: > A process called nominalization takes a perfectly spry verb and embalms it into a lifeless noun by adding a suffix like –ance, –ment, or –ation. Instead of affirming an idea, you effect its affirmation; rather than postponing something, you implement a postponement. Helen Sword calls them "zombie nouns" because they lumber across the scene without a conscious agent directing their motion.[0] There is a lot more detail in his book "Sense of Style: The Thinking Person's Guide to Writing in the 21st Century" [0]: https://stevenpinker.com/files/pinker/files/why_academics_stink_at_writing.pdf https://stevenpinker.com/files/pinker/files/why_academics_st...
- jmkd 6y ago
  Thanks!

meerita 6y ago

As a non native english-speaker, my struggles in my original language is finishing sentences early instead doing long ones. Sometimes I write long phrases, full of commas, semicolons, etc. I found that in enlish people tend to be more conservative when writing sentences.

RMPR 6y ago
This is also the case in my native language (French), I assume it's pretty common for Latin languages.
- ethanbond 6y ago
  I only speak English but share this hypothesis based on reading translated novels from Latin language writers. Jose Saramago (Portuguese) is a striking example. Beautiful stuff but characteristically different from how native English speakers structure things.
- meerita 6y ago
  I have troubles, I guess, to know exactly when to period or comman depending on the sound of the pause. To me it is like everything is short paused, so everything will be a comma :D
geocrasher 6y ago
Native English speaker here. For me, any sentence with more than one comma is telling me that it's not one sentence. It's two, three, or four sentences. And to be clear, I'm talking about sentences that are very long, not sentences that contain a list of items such as the previous sentence. Example: ----------------------------------------------------------- The more I write, the more I realize that sentence structure matters, as does grammar, and even spelling, and also choice of words, which affects some readers for whom English is a non-primary language. As I write more, I realize that sentence structure, grammar, and spelling matter. My choice of words is important because unnecessary complexity may negatively affect some readers. ----------------------------------------------------------- It wasn't always this way. 50 years ago, it was common for sentences to be much longer. I often read stories to my wife that were written in the 50's, 60's, and 70's. They are personal accounts, not professional writing. Life stories. They quite often include sentences that take more than one breath to read aloud, because they are so incredibly long that they deplete me of oxygen before I can finish reading the sentence, which I do find quite difficult to read since I am now concentrating on my breathing instead of on the written word, which is not just awkward but also distracting. YMMV.

Thorentis 6y ago

> Looking back, I always struggle with writing. Shouldn't it be "struggled"? (Sorry, I had to.)

torh 6y ago
> I can bear the pain of writing in high school, but I almost gave up in university And this should be "could"?
- adamfaliq 6y ago
  Fixed it :)
  - mohamez 6y ago
    As a non-native English speaker, your blog post and your interactions and feedback to replies and suggestions to fix some "mistakes" on your blog post is an inspiration for me, because I've always struggled to start writing fearing that I'll make "banal" and "obvious" mistakes that will decrease my credibility on the subject I'm writing about.
SagelyGuru 6y ago
"The principle suggests us to focus..." Should not it be: "The principle suggests that we focus..."?

MaxBarraclough 6y ago

Readers might also enjoy You Might as Well Be a Great Copy Editor. https://blog.regehr.org/archives/1471 https://blog.regehr.org/archives/1471 Discussed 4 months ago: https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=23631027 https://news.ycombinator.com/item?id=23631027

adamfaliq 6y ago

Hi everyone, OP here. Writing has always been a struggle for me. I just started to post consistently on this blog two weeks ago. Didn't expect this to get to the front page of HN. I hope you guys find it helpful. I'd appreciate any feedback or comment on the post! P.S: Fixed all the grammatical errors in the post.

probablypower 6y ago
Hey Adam, the content itself is great and the tips are bang on. However, I think you should proof read the article again. An article on 'Improving Your Writing' loses a lot of credibility when it has sentences like: > The character, 'hotel' has does an action 'wanted'. which should be: > The character, 'hotel', has an action, 'wanted'. It also seems like you rely on a single source, Williams and Colomb (1990). Is this your personal summary of that book? Do you recommend reading it, or do you believe your post captures the most important points?
- adamfaliq 6y ago
  Hi there, 1. Fixed the mistake :) 2. Yes, totally recommend it. I've read a few books on writing and I think this is the best so far. The way the authors discuss the mechanics of writing is refreshing. It'll give you a good framework not just to write, but also to think. 3. This post encapsulates what I learned from the book and my experience to improve my writing skill.
MrPowers 6y ago
Thanks for making the post. Focusing on creating a clear thesis at the start of your blog will help your readers understand the purpose of your post. The first paragraph communicates you've struggled with writing in the past, the second para says writing advice is often low quality, and the third paragraph explains the characteristics of good writing (hints at the thesis). You could make a single thesis like this: "This post explains the characteristics of good writing and how I was able to improve my writing skills." You could continue with "learning to write well was a great personal struggle, especially because writing training materials didn't help". That could also be considered a separate thesis for a different post. Paragraphs like these can be made more concise: > Most writers struggle to write well when the subjects use technical terms. Technical terms are confusing when they are not introduced properly. This technique is helpful when communicating complex information that requires technical terms. When you introduce complex information, design the sentence that it appears in, so that you can locate that term at the end. Here's how you could reword it: Technical writing is difficult, especially when the terminology is not properly introduced. It's best to introduce technical terms at the end of sentences.

DrBazza 6y ago

Definitely these two: 1. Good writing is clear 4. Good writing is concise Use a simple, reduced vocabulary, as your readers are likely to have English as a second language (e.g. https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/world-44569277 https://www.bbc.co.uk/news/world-44569277). And as Richard Feynman pointed out, try explaining it to a child. If you can't go back and rewrite it. Don't use (modern) slang, and avoid writing 'conversational' English. It's "lessons" not "learnings". How much have you eaten? How many eatings have you had? Ugh. Don't use 'ping' or 'reach out' (you're not the Four Tops). And what on earth is "welp/whelp" that people have started using in the last couple of years? It's "well, for one thing..."

rimliu 6y ago
English is my fourth language. I hate seeing advice like "use simple, reduced vocabulary". Dumbing everything down is not a way to go. Feynman said, that if you cannot explaind it to a child you do not understand it, not that you should communicate with everyone like they were kids.
- DrBazza 6y ago
  > Feynman said, that if you cannot explaind it to a child you do not understand it, not that you should communicate with everyone like they were kids. That's not what I said, there was a full stop, not a comma. I was applying Feynman's idea to writing, if you can't explain something simply in plain English, you really should rewrite it to reach a wider audience. > I hate seeing advice like "use simple, reduced vocabulary". Sure, and if articles are written 'normally', for people with English as a second language, that means that they will learn more English words when they encounter new ones. However "I" is one person, and an author wants to reach the widest audience, with the lowest common denominator. I don't understand much German or French, for example, but an article written in simple German or French is much more accessible to me (the lowest common denominator). Writing is about reaching all of your audience.
  - buran77 6y ago
    I think it boils down to "don't use a five dollar word when a fifty cent word will do". It's not a matter of always using simple language, sometimes that doesn't cut it. Some concepts can't be broken down to the simplest words and still keep the quality of the conversation, the precision, the density of information. I think it's just better to keep language as simple as it can be, as simple as the topic dictates. Don't complicate it just for the sake of sounding smart if the discussion doesn't require it.

geocrasher 6y ago

I've been writing for several years, and the more I blog, write training materials, or just write to customers, three things keep helping me improve: 1) Less is more. A) Write all you like, and then cut out all the stuff that doesn't matter. Like the way you just said the same thing 3 times in a row. B) The less you say the less someone has to argue with. The opposite is also true C) Stick to main points and save gory details for later, unless you're in the "Gory Details" section already. 2) Read your writing out loud. What looks great on the page might sound terrible aloud. If it sounds terrible aloud, then it'll be awkward for others to read, too. 3) Just write. Get the words onto the page. This is the hardest but most important thing. Don't pay attention to form, redundancy, spelling, grammar, or redundancy. Just get the words down. These so-called brain dumps will help you get expressive. Then you can edit the heck out of yourself as mentioned in 1 and 2. 4) Okay, a fourth. No matter what you write, read Steven King's "On Writing" to find out what it means to "kill your darlings". Epic book.

martin-adams 6y ago
I use the text to speech in my articles as a 'read it out loud' exercise.
- tartoran 6y ago
  I do too and it truly makes a difference. When I read something out loud im still biased as my own voice somehow matches with my internal voice I hear when I'm silent reading. When it's read out loud with a different voice it registers completely differently.
farleykr 6y ago
In regards to point 2: Having kids and reading tons of books out loud to them has really impressed upon me how important this is. Reading my own writing out loud has been a real turning point for me in developing my writing skills.
tartoran 6y ago
Thanks for sharing these observations. Im not much of a writer but would love to improve on my writing skills. I personally have the most problem with 3 and the only way I could get more productive brain dumps is to record myself talking freely instead, then rewrite it. But this is a time consuming process and was wondering what kind of exercises/drills I could use to ease the brain dump constipation. To me there's something that blocks me when I attempt to write something down freely but I feel that that the right exercises would ease it. I feel like Im making a wrong step somewhere that makes me become self conscious at the wrong moment.

hestefisk 6y ago

Good post. There is one important topic not touched upon yet: clear structure. Without a strong organising structure and logic, it’s hard to navigate, especially for non-prose. I can highly recommend the book “The pyramid principle” as a way to really improve structured writing.

jungletime 6y ago

I love youtube, but so many videos would be improved if a little writing was done before hand, and then the video edited to a script. This is a good essay by Orwell, that's related. "Politics and the English Language" https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_polit/ https://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/politics/english/e_poli...

mariodiana 6y ago

Regarding rule two, cohesion, I remember being struck by the writing in this New Yorker piece from 2011 on the subject of Rwandan bicycle racers. This goes beyond good writing. The writer didn't merely begin his sentences with what he had just said or with what he could count on being familiar to the reader. I noticed that the writer would take a paragraph and somehow manage to raise a question in my mind, and then in the next paragraph he would answer that question. This happened over and over. Give it a read! https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2011/07/11/climbers-philip-gourevitch https://www.newyorker.com/magazine/2011/07/11/climbers-phili...

Daub 6y ago

From the article title: "How to Write Well...". Surely instead "How to Write Effectively..."? Aside from that, I understand the OP’s pain in learning how to write. My initiation by fire in the craft of writing was when I supervised my first PhD. It was like like the labours of Sisyphus. One principle I can add to the list of principles that is evolving here, if you think your book/thesis is finished, it probably isn’t. That is why God gave us Editors. Notice I have capitalized both God and Editors.

randcraw 6y ago

> A story has two components – characters and actions. Three components... the third is A POINT. Unless the path of the story's narrative promises to lead somewhere, the reader loses interest and stops reading.

jzer0cool 6y ago

Quick Summary: * Good writing tells a story. Use characters and actions. * String together cohesive prose using consistent topic strings at the beginning of a sentence. * Put emphasis of new ideas at the end of the sentence. * Be concise and with fewer words. Unnecessary to state with reader can infer.