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> If I were to do this, my paragraphs would become at least 3 times as long. Because much of my writing I find this jarring to read. That should be a comma, no

> If I were to do this, my paragraphs would become at least 3 times as long. Because much of my writing I find this jarring to read. That should be a comma, not a period. By using a period, you've technically made your sentence shorter, but the structure is unchanged. Alternatively you could just chop the Because, and it would flow fine. I really doubt your writing is thrice the density of mine. I very rarely encounter writing that approaches sentences this way, authors are able to get by fine without it. I find it similarly jarring to read the sentences beginning with and, or but. It's as if you've told me the sentence is finished, only to then reopen it. It's like a programming language permitting a && b; && c; There may be situations where it's ok to do this, but I wouldn't overuse it.

rocqua 6y ago
> Alternatively you could just chop the Because, and it would flow fine. Hmmm, I guess I agree. I am going to try that a lot. In sentence structure I often get the issue of "$Claim, because $justification." This leads to really long sentences that I feel should be split. And again, I want to preserve the link between the two parts. Doing $Claim. $Justification. Feels like I am making an unsubstantiated claim followed by another unrelated claim. In the programming language I would see this sort of as: int a = foo(b); int foo(b){ return 1 + b } (Ignoring a forward declaration of foo in some header). I guess this is similar to my earlier point. Where I want to split the un-related parts but still want to capture the strong relation between the two. An alternative might be something like. "We know that $justification. Hence, it follows that $claim." You've given me food for thought. Thanks!