Is it about the technical details or about the delivery and the writing? I find it hard to come up with the details while making a lucid narrative, usually in

Is it about the technical details or about the delivery and the writing? I find it hard to come up with the details while making a lucid narrative, usually in order to write a good narrative I really need a tight grasp on the technical details. Even then, it can be hard to figure out which thread to pull on first. Many times understanding your audience is key to making a lucid argument in a way that will convince them. That is step 1. But it sounds like if you are wondering which draft is better that you are maybe worried about the writing aspects, such as word choice and ordering sentences / paragraphs. If so, I'd suggest maybe starting with a bullet point list or an outline with subheadings with the details. Then you can turn each point into a paragraph or sentence. Reordering will be much easier and not worrying about writing full sentences can lessen writing anxiety. If you end up writing a really good outline, sometimes that can be even more effective and quick to read than a more long form paper. Since you also bring up being concise (which is different from lucidity), I find it totally normal to end up cutting a 1/3rd of the text of a first draft. Edit ruthlessly; use active voice, cut out useless or random thoughts that may be interesting to you, but won't be to your reader. Also, of course, practice makes perfect. And find a good editor.