3 ms·
First sentence: "Invariably my work requires to create and consume various presentations of differing nature." Does anyone else find this style of writing unbe
by Mouse47 6y ago
First sentence: "Invariably my work requires to create and consume various presentations of differing nature."
Does anyone else find this style of writing unbearably pompous?
- jedwards1211 6y agoIt sounds like a non-native speaker to me, I wouldn't even be surprised if this is Google translate output
- hliyan 6y agoI'm a non-native speak and I too find myself writing like this on occasion. Would love to know what about it rubs readers the wrong way.
- rubatuga 6y ago“Invariably” is an uncommon word to be honest. Also “nature” in this context is uncommon as well. Kind of archaic. It’s pompous because it uses a whole bunch of words to say nothing. Use of the active voice instead of passive voice would have helped as well. Add in unnecessary words such as ”ergo”, a frilly web font, and people assume the author just wants to show off.
- cfqycwz 6y agoYeah--compare an alternate phrasing here, like "I watch and give a lot of presentations at work."
- ojilles 6y agoThanks! https://github.com/ojilles/jilles.net/commit/fe6010fb208905eac1e0656e18bf8b8c7945566b https://github.com/ojilles/jilles.net/commit/fe6010fb208905e... (I do hope I can clear the Google Translate bar of quality. Should have edited before publishing! And taken more of my own advice.)