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That alpha-blend or whatever happens as you scroll is incredibly obnoxious. I nearly clicked away and ignored this because it's so awful. The grammar of the pa
by deltaveedaddy 6y ago
That alpha-blend or whatever happens as you scroll is incredibly obnoxious. I nearly clicked away and ignored this because it's so awful.
The grammar of the page suggests an asocial author with limited social skills, and perhaps a misunderstanding of what the objective of a landing page is for.
"""
We only earn real customer money, at any cost.
Free or $10/year, later adjusted with you to follow our expenses.
"""
It boggles my mind that you'd consider writing this, in this manner, to try and attract interest. It sounds clunky, complicated, awkward, mechanical; there's really not enough adjectives to capture this page's problems.
Then you have a picture of code (you've automatically disqualified yourself far before now, but an image of code instead of <code> blocks will always lose my interest, personally)
To summarize, this is horrendous, and you can do better.
The first three seconds of this webpage are losing 99% of your prospects. Not that your page even explains what your product is anyways, but for clarity's sake:
Famous image in the background, that's distracting, is this an art project?
"TAKING THEM SOON" What does that mean? It sounds vaguely threatening, or maybe the author is just illiterate.
Scrolling down beyond that results in a flashbang exploding before my face, so I'd leave.
0/10
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- ptramo 6y agoFeedback is insulting to English as a Second Language speaker, calls it a landing page when the first lines explicitly describe it as not (and answer some of your questions), and spent a lot of time pouring unactionable vitriol. I won't grade it as we're not in school. Maybe consider this is me cobbling together my message rather than building a finished product and we'll be on better footing. Thanks anyway!
- dang 6y agoPlease don't be a jerk in HN comments, especially when commenting on someone else's work. The damage you do exceeds the help you give. Don't forget that, in an "objects in mirror are closer than they appear" sort of way, it's easy to seem like a much larger asshole in internet comments than one seems to oneself. If you don't want to come across this way, you need apply a corrective transformation to avoid it. (And if you do want to come across this way, you shouldn't be doing it on HN.) If you wouldn't mind reviewing https://news.ycombinator.com/newsguidelines.html https://news.ycombinator.com/newsguidelines.html and sticking to the rules when posting here, we'd be grateful.