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Asking as a non-native speaker, how would you write this sentence instead? I tried but cannot produce any syntactically correct alternative better than this.
by uranusjr 6y ago
Asking as a non-native speaker, how would you write this sentence instead? I tried but cannot produce any syntactically correct alternative better than this.
- kevin_thibedeau 6y ago"For three days, dozens of his family members sat at his bedside in the hospital. The next day he died." Still a little awkward but not bending the language to the breaking point. Pretty sad considering New Yorker's editorial prowess.
- maxerickson 6y agoThe next day, when the patient in his 50's died, Reido's thoughts immediately went to the dozens of visitors the man had in the previous days.
- mlyle 6y agoThe man, who had had all the visitors, died. The frequently-visited man died. The day after he'd had all the visitors, he died.
- DenisM 6y ago> The man, who had had all the visitors, died. I think that's just it. I'd add the word "family" in there, to make the connection stronger: The man, who had had all the family visitors, died.