1 thing I noticed is that the longer version is REALLY cramped and a lot harder to read than the short version. I'd suggest making a lot more white space in th

1 thing I noticed is that the longer version is REALLY cramped and a lot harder to read than the short version. I'd suggest making a lot more white space in the longer version for easier reading. The shorter version also has a headline, the longer kind of does but it's not noticeable. Keep running tests - you'll find a winner! :)