Yes. It's an example of trying to write how you'd want it spoken. The written word is a different medium. It would be like writing: > She enters the room. Pa

Yes. It's an example of trying to write how you'd want it spoken. The written word is a different medium. It would be like writing: > She enters the room. Pan left and there's a photo on the wall. Cut back to her, she's brushing a strand of hair from her face. Now cut to the bartender. Zoom in on him. He's polishing a glass, staring at nothing. etc. It's a pastiche of a movie scene. It's not that you can't do it or that the reader won't know what you're trying to do. Unless there's a specific reason to do so, it's probably not the best option.