I think you write very well, but I can take a swing at some minor stuff. I'll email you with suggestions/revisions when I get round to it. That's "when" not "if

I think you write very well, but I can take a swing at some minor stuff. I'll email you with suggestions/revisions when I get round to it. That's "when" not "if"--I will do it, and within 1-3 weeks, but I'm trying to finish a novel (not getting paid for it though! sounds of universe cackling in derision)