Please work on tightening your prose. It's hard to follow what you're trying to say. Immigration of some forms is obviously the result of corporate pressure, y

Please work on tightening your prose. It's hard to follow what you're trying to say. Immigration of some forms is obviously the result of corporate pressure, you're right on that; but you could stand to make your points clearer. As it stands, your comment sounds edgy and juvenile, with scare quotes on every other thing, and too many adverbs.