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I applaud the aim of the article, and there is certainly an assorted collection of a few good tidbits about early adopters in there, but this article's tone is

by swombat 16y ago

I applaud the aim of the article, and there is certainly an assorted collection of a few good tidbits about early adopters in there, but this article's tone is too perky, the content is too diluted by the voice the author used, and fundamentally there isn't that much solid advice. The site byline says it's "Young entrepreneur's jot", and indeed the article feels like it was written for a 10 year old. I mean, wtf @ This is the main thing in whole article, I was just building the base till now. (Yah! This is gonna be an essay… kinda). The author should learn to be more concise. This should have been a clear, simple, straightforward, short article.

kingsidharth 16y ago
Noted, will keep in mind next time I write.
- swombat 16y ago
  One thing I try (and don't always succeed) in doing is to ask myself - if someone who is very busy is going to read this article, can they extract the value out of it quickly and efficiently? There's two key things you could do to enable that: 1. Use headings that summarise the text below; currently, your headings are introductions to the text below rather than summaries. Of course you can't get everything into a 5-word heading, but looking at the heading, the reader should not only know what type of content is coming, but also largely what the conclusion of it will be. A really good book on this topic is http://www.amazon.co.uk/Pyramid-Principle-Logic-Writing-Thinking/dp/0273710516/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1291986844&sr=8-1 http://www.amazon.co.uk/Pyramid-Principle-Logic-Writing-Thin... 2. Summarise the key points at the end. A lot of people scroll through, glance at the headings, then look at the conclusion, before they decide whether to read the article. Summarising your points will, paradoxically, get more people to read the full article (or at least dive into the points of interest to them). I believe that if you want people's attention, you need to show that you're respectful of their precious and limited time.
  - kingsidharth 16y ago
    Great ideas! Will work with them next I sit to write. Thanks, early adopter :P

by swombat 16y ago

kingsidharth 16y ago

Noted, will keep in mind next time I write.

swombat 16y ago
One thing I try (and don't always succeed) in doing is to ask myself - if someone who is very busy is going to read this article, can they extract the value out of it quickly and efficiently? There's two key things you could do to enable that: 1. Use headings that summarise the text below; currently, your headings are introductions to the text below rather than summaries. Of course you can't get everything into a 5-word heading, but looking at the heading, the reader should not only know what type of content is coming, but also largely what the conclusion of it will be. A really good book on this topic is http://www.amazon.co.uk/Pyramid-Principle-Logic-Writing-Thinking/dp/0273710516/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1291986844&sr=8-1 http://www.amazon.co.uk/Pyramid-Principle-Logic-Writing-Thin... 2. Summarise the key points at the end. A lot of people scroll through, glance at the headings, then look at the conclusion, before they decide whether to read the article. Summarising your points will, paradoxically, get more people to read the full article (or at least dive into the points of interest to them). I believe that if you want people's attention, you need to show that you're respectful of their precious and limited time.
- kingsidharth 16y ago
  Great ideas! Will work with them next I sit to write. Thanks, early adopter :P