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The font you use for your tag line is too silly — it doesn't make me feel particularly learned or wise or any of the things I associate with scholarliness. Ditt
by rorymarinich 16y ago
The font you use for your tag line is too silly — it doesn't make me feel particularly learned or wise or any of the things I associate with scholarliness. Ditto that wishy-washy blue color.
The "email-subscribe" widget is ugly and gray. The border is too thick on the "email" and the slightly rounded "subscribe" box feels like a parody of web 2.0.
"to get updates on our progress" should not be on a separate line from "subscribe" but in general it should not be there at all. Think of a more concise way to say what you want to say.
The "h" and the "r" in your logo font make me want to punch a baby even though said baby has done nothing wrong. I don't know what font that is but it makes me feel kind of like the bondage rape scene in Blue Velvet makes me feel.
"We're taking it back" should not be on a separate line from "The internet was built...", nor should it be in bold.
So inasmuch as "coming soon" pages go, you managed to incorporate all the things you're supposed to have while simultaneously making them all very unpleasant. But why is this posted here? Why does it matter? Is this an attempt to make us subscribe and build up your prelaunch audience? Or are you a designer trying to master the art of coming soon pages? Otherwise I don't know why you'd care enough to ask for a critique.
(Also: WAS the Internet built for universities? What does that even mean? Do you mean the old old Internet that started as a university project? Or do you mean 2005-era Facebook? I am so confused. Please explain.)
- mhluongo 16y agoMy buy in - I'm a developer trying to develop taste. I'm not sure if we're going to have a designer for this project, and the more aesthetic feedback I can get, the better (as I see it). The wishy-washy blue is being a/b tested to settle a bet- usually we're a more scholastic brown. Working on your suggestions, thanks =)
- mhluongo 16y ago(Also: the old old Internet. Any ideas on how to make that more clear?)
- rorymarinich 16y agoI'm still confused myself; the Internet hasn't been restricted to university usage since the way-early 90s, right? What specific service are you providing? Without that I can't be more clear. (If it's something you'd rather keep secret, I understand, but can't exactly help much. Or if you want to talk privately, send an email and I'll try to get back to you quickly.)