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They listened as a river of incandescent margarine ignited fuel tanks and burst the tires of abandoned vehicles. This may be the most evocative sentence I've r
by amacbride 8y ago
They listened as a river of incandescent margarine ignited fuel tanks and burst the tires of abandoned vehicles.
This may be the most evocative sentence I've read this year.
- zaphirplane 8y agoIt needs a comma badly I read it wrong in the article and then in this comment incandescent margarine ,{{ ignited fuel tanks and burst the tires }} of abandoned vehicles
- weatherlight 8y agoIt needs a comma, badly. I read it wrong in the article and then in this comment. > Me too!
- mirimir 8y agoHuh? The agent: "river of incandescent margarine". What it did: "ignited fuel tanks and burst the tires" What it did it to: "abandoned vehicles" I do find "incandescent" hard to imagine. Because it's just fat, and it'll carbonize before becoming incandescent. Maybe "flaming margarine" or something. Also, "listened" indicated that they heard, but didn't see. It doesn't really need punctuation. But maybe this would be clearer: They listened as a river of incandescent margarine ignited the fuel tanks, and burst the tires, of abandoned vehicles. Or maybe: They listened as a river of incandescent margarine engulfed abandoned vehicles, igniting fuel tanks and bursting tires.
- mirimir 8y agoBelated edit: Maybe "river of incandescent margarine vapor". But it wouldn't really be margarine anymore. Without enough oxygen to fully burn, it'd be mostly a mixture of carbon particles, H2O, H2, CO and CO2. Like a candle flame.
- atombender 8y agoNo comma needed. The margarine ignited the fuel tanks. Your interpretation isn't what the author intended.