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look at the site with fresh eyes. Load the homepage and only allow yourself to read the most obvious 5 words on it. What do you read? At the moment when I do
by user24 16y ago
look at the site with fresh eyes.
Load the homepage and only allow yourself to read the most obvious 5 words on it.
What do you read? At the moment when I do that, I read: "plurty cart checkout light gloves".
Just put a nice bright tagline under plurty that says "Number 1 for rave lights" and bam!
- treeface 16y agoGreat idea! Love the critiques :-D
- prawn 16y agoFirst thing I noticed was "top product" which is pretty generic. Might be better if that said "green lasers - our top seller" or similar?
- patio11 16y agoSerious Ravers Love Our Lasers -- Pew Pew You may want to take off the "pew pew". I am not plugged into that community. Alternate phrasing "Like Glow Sticks, Without The Suck" Edit: Want an intense effect for your next rave? Try a green laser -- it is magical in a dark room or at nighttime. Each laser pen is effectively a laser pointer with a detachable kaleidoscope light filter on the top. When this filter is on, the single, solid laser beam transforms into hundreds of different points of light on a surface. Too dangerous to point at a face.
- il 16y agoReally? Reading that, I hear the Pew Pew sound in my head, and it makes the laser seem totally awesome, even if it doesn't actually make that sound.
- Johnnytops 16y agoAs the co-owner of this site, I highly approve of the pew pew and have added it to the description. Now to figure out how to add a cross-browser compatible sound effect...
- templaedhel 16y agoOh god, next thing you know you'll have gif backgrounds and have your whole level middle management walk out. Don't go down that path.
- treeface 16y agoI have an even better idea: animated gifs. Think about the revenue possibilities!
- treeface 16y agoI just made a giant banner that is randomly selecting a bunch of phrases. Yours is one of them. Also, you are awesome. Thanks for the idea!
- natep 16y agoI came to the conversation late, and so while I was reading here about people not knowing what the site is about, the first thing I noticed on your site was "We do rave gear. We do it well." I definitely got what your site was about right away (sorry I'm not a raver!)
- chc 16y agoMy girlfriend got out of the rave scene not too long ago, and I guarantee you she would have bought it for the "Pew Pew" alone.
- anigbrowl 16y agoYou may want to take off the "pew pew". I guarantee this phrase improve sales. Rave culture likes silly.
- treeface 16y agoAnother great idea! This is now implemented.