There is nothing wrong with adopting a more conversational style for professional writing, particularly in our industry. If you were in e.g. academia, failure t

There is nothing wrong with adopting a more conversational style for professional writing, particularly in our industry. If you were in e.g. academia, failure to adopt the consensus tone of journal articles might be career-limiting, but you can get a way with an awful lot in tech. Your comment seems comprehensible; I wouldn't have been surprised to see it from a native speaker in an internal email thread. My biggest concrete suggestion is to write 10X more in 2019 than you did in 2018, and explicitly ask people for feedback on it. (10X is a pretty big leap, but most people write far, far less than they think they do, and the cure for being inexperienced is experience.)