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Here's my version! The only regret is the "man", which in Chinese should be "person", but "person" has always seemed so poetically dead, to my sense. 《一颗螺丝掉在地上
by girzel 8y ago
Here's my version! The only regret is the "man", which in Chinese should be "person", but "person" has always seemed so poetically dead, to my sense.
《一颗螺丝掉在地上》 A Screw Drops
一颗螺丝掉在地上 A screw drops
在这个加班的夜晚 In this overtime night
垂直降落，轻轻一响 The straight fall, the light clink
不会引起任何人的注意 That draws no one's attention.
就像在此之前 Just as once before
某个相同的夜晚 On a similar night
有个人掉在地上 A man dropped.
- girzel 8y agoNow I can't decide if 在地上 is really necessary to get in there. If so, the first line is: "A screw drops to the ground" And the last: "A man dropped to the ground"
- guiltygatorade 8y agoI think there's a sense of conclusiveness when "to the ground" is added. Something drops or falls can still be caught, but the author didn't leave that ambiguous.