Agreed and understood (and upvoted). It was a first draft. I think what I've learned by going through this one round already is that you have to have at least

Agreed and understood (and upvoted). It was a first draft. I think what I've learned by going through this one round already is that you have to have at least one concrete word. I don't know if "tracks storms" is it though. People track storms driving around in SUV's in the midwest during tornado season. I think the element "tracks storms" is missing is that it doesn't smack of any ambition. Microsoft's "a computer on every desktop" and Google's "organizing the world's information" do.