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Boy thats an exciting story, and written from the perspective of such an interesting character! My favorite part of the story is when the protagonist met the ga
by arakobama 8y ago
Boy thats an exciting story, and written from the perspective of such an interesting character! My favorite part of the story is when the protagonist met the gang member.
Some notes: crips didn't really exist in nyc until about 20 years ago, so it might be more believable if you changed the gang member's affiliation (Latin Kings maybe? I think they were around then). Also, no one says "waxed his ass", it makes you sound super corny. Keep at it though, eventually you'll nail that hard-boiled detective thing you're going for :)
- RaceWon 8y agoI know, you're right; it was complete BullShit, and the reason he didn't kill me Was Not because I matter of Factly told him "I don't give a fuck" when he screamed "I'm gonna kill you" while pointing make believe gun at me. But whatever... you're the big expert on my life (and phrases racers say and the timeline of the arrival of gangs in NYC,) and have certainly mixed with more dangerous people than I have. ;) And yep, for sure nobody ever got shot for no real fucking reason in the city back then, nor in Mexico nowadays. Crime is made up by Fox News.. and gangs--they don't exist.