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One / your / it / we: make up your mind on pronoun and stick with it!

• coldtea 8y ago
  Maybe focus on the content? Any disparity is just on this single sentence: "your appetite increases" (as opposed to "their" or "one's"). "Their" as used across the comment is not meant as the plural possessive. It's instead used as a gender-neutral pronoun (a common use) to avoid repeating "one's" or using "his/hers". It, in "your appetite increases and it's more likely to overeat" etc., refers to the situation/possibility (as in "If they sky's cloudy it's more likely to rain"). It is normal to use different pronouns to refer to different entities. Finally, the "we" at the end is perfectly fitting. It's a generalization, beyond what each individual does.
  • barrkel 8y ago
    It was really distracting to read. The mix - and there was a they in there too - broke focus. Sorry.
    • coldtea 8y ago
      No problem! Though "they" was used as a gender neutral pronoun -- not to change the subject from "one" to some group. E.g. as in: "if one drinks milk, their bones would benefit".
      • barrkel 8y ago
        I think once you've chosen "one", you need to stick with it: "if one drinks milk, one's bones would benefit".