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Ok, how about: "A juwo is a list that can help you Save Time, Organize, and be More Productive." The para you asked is taken from juwo.com: A "Swiss Army knif
by juwo 19y ago
Ok, how about: "A juwo is a list that can help you Save Time, Organize, and be More Productive."
The para you asked is taken from juwo.com:
A "Swiss Army knife" piece of software that gives more power to consumers to structure snippets of audio, video and text as a bullet list, to more easily index and annotate them, and to share the lists with others. Its benefits extend to multimedia as related to more enriching broadcasts, collaboration and organizing.
- Goladus 19y agoFor starters, eliminate "Swiss Army Knife." It's a bit too general and therefore distracting. Also eliminate the part about giving more power to consumers. When I visit your website, I'm not thinking of myself as "consumers." I'm just a guy who wants to get something done and wondering if maybe you can help. Take the rest of that sentence and separate it into one sentence for each idea.
- juwo 19y agoI appreciate your help. What I am struggling with is, I am doing all the stuff - but people (at least on YC) dont get it: 1) links to 3 screenshots 2) simple cartoon diagrams with an analogy to shopping lists 3) a list of "what is in it for me" i.e. how juwo can help you. 4) links to demos for each of the above in 3). Isnt all this good enough?
- juwo 19y ago