May come across as negative, but hey. Almost all suffer from the same weaknesses. Although it's debatable, I reckon that elevator pitches (general ones anyway)

May come across as negative, but hey. Almost all suffer from the same weaknesses. Although it's debatable, I reckon that elevator pitches (general ones anyway) should contain the following. A brief hook as danohuiginn has written. What's the product and who are the 'buyers'? What's the revenue model? Who is behind the company? Competition? Unique Selling Point(s)? Transpondr - what is the product itself? Is it free analytics for your podcast? Who is the 'we' behind it? Is there competition and why is it different? it's first sentence/hook is good though. Logobid - Should think about who they are pitching to. Why should I set the price? It's not as clear as so the above note. How are they making money - rev share? Competition? How is it different? who are they? Publicitr - the first sentence doesn't add anything. they are talking about a market, not what they do. again, who are they? competition, how different? not exactly passionate. siphs - is it share-this or tell-a-friend? Does it matter which? Choose - bloggers or publishers? Try not to offer everything to everyone at this stage. Far too wordy. As above. How to monetise? Who are they? Competition - anyone else doing it, what is wrong with several submits? zambino - nice hook. too wordy though. Second sentence - what does it mean? Again, who are they, competition, USP, revenue model?