In the spirit of picking things apart (because it is fun and edifying), let's talk about Microsoft's attempt. > Founded in 1975, Microsoft Nobody cares when y

In the spirit of picking things apart (because it is fun and edifying), let's talk about Microsoft's attempt. > Founded in 1975, Microsoft Nobody cares when you were founded. Now I think your company is old and out of date. > (Nasdaq “MSFT”) Nobody cares. If they did, they'd use Google Finance to find out. > is the worldwide leader Brrraaap. Worldwide and leader are both banned words. Also, are you really a world-wide leader if your market cap is trailing your biggest competitor? I guess that depends how you define it . . . > in software, services and solutions Oh, God, not solutions. Services is almost as bad. > that help people and businesses realize their full potential. This is sufficiently abstract that it could not possibly offend nor inspire anyone. I've never bought something because it helped me "realize my potential." I've bought things to smash noobs, yes, or to hack on sweet projects, or to write the next great American novel. But never to realize my full potential. This phrase belongs on the back of a self-help book.