Yes this is my first essay. Just gave it a try by summarizing what I learnt from pg's essay and writing my views on about the topic. I have to agree with you a

Yes this is my first essay. Just gave it a try by summarizing what I learnt from pg's essay and writing my views on about the topic. I have to agree with you about the "Most engineers ..." part. I guess I should have used "Most engineers around me" instead. I too felt that my sentences were too long when I read it. But I never thought it would be easily noticeable by those who read it. Thanks you for the detailed feedback. I really appreciate that you took sometime to read the piece :) I saved your comment in for future reference with the idea that it would help to refine my essays based on it.