A little feedback -- I like the idea, but I think it is too brief, and therefore comes across a bit superficial ... it seems to imply that everything was magica

A little feedback -- I like the idea, but I think it is too brief, and therefore comes across a bit superficial ... it seems to imply that everything was magically happy ever after other than a few bumps in the road. The struggle with the story-based approach, I guess, is to find the sweet spot where you're detailed enough that the story has some meat to it, but not too overly detailed such that it takes 2 hours and deep concentration to read. (I don't know how to find that sweet spot, so I'm not throwing stones. Just wanted to pass on some feedback in case it helps).