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Great idea to ask input on HN! The message you are sending (purely IMHO) We are a local company.... - We are important! You can use our service... - Working wi
by leff_f 9y ago
Great idea to ask input on HN!
The message you are sending (purely IMHO)
We are a local company.... - We are important!
You can use our service... - Working with us is optional
We are already deploying in ... Our success doesn't depend on you
I can give you a 15 minute demo ... - I'll just use some of your time
Thank you for your time. Your input.... - After all I said, we kinda need you.
- leff_f 9y agoSorry for missing line breaks :(
- leff_f 9y agoHope this helps.
- fosokoko 9y agoWhat do you think of the last line? should I nix it ?
- leff_f 9y agoTo be fair. Here are the good things: good idea to talk about what is the company and how the service could be used. Great idea to mention the previous success. "Your input will be … " - very good!
- leff_f 9y agoLet's apply a formula to your email: You are important to us and we need your input I care about you and I'll take as little of your time as possible I'd like to give you something important and will not waste your time I appreciate the time you already spent! Let's work together! Hope this structure helps.