I'm not your target demo either, but here's my 2 cents from a usability & web conversion perspective: I'd keep everything above the fold (or rather, don't make

I'm not your target demo either, but here's my 2 cents from a usability & web conversion perspective: I'd keep everything above the fold (or rather, don't make the page scroll at all) and keep the Get Notified, FB, Twitter visible (maybe on the right side, along with the copy. The get notified is your call to action - your goal is to convert people into giving you their email addresses - don't hide it at the bottom. And yes, your copy can be tightened and be more compelling. good luck! :)