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Not to divert too much, but what is it about this moment that strikes you so? While I love the prose, reading carries no sense of tension in my mind.
by dclowd9901 10y ago
Not to divert too much, but what is it about this moment that strikes you so? While I love the prose, reading carries no sense of tension in my mind.
- smcnally 10y agojotux would probably need to paste in a few pages from before and after to give the tension context. The pistol mentioned was taken from a dead drug dealer. The someone next to the truck would drive most of the rest of the story.
- jotux 10y agoHe's returning to the truck in the middle of the night to give the guy water and had just found out he'd been shot in the head (meaning someone else had been there). This is where he turns around to see someone standing next to his truck he parked up the hill and is coming to the realization that things are about to get really bad.