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Good points. This is our about: http://thinkcode.tv/about http://thinkcode.tv/about. It's not exactly "how you doin'", but it's doesn't contain any bullshit eit

Good points. This is our about: http://thinkcode.tv/about http://thinkcode.tv/about. It's not exactly "how you doin'", but it's doesn't contain any bullshit either. What do you think?

aw3c2 16y ago
Your sentences are too long for me to be easily scanned. Also I would suggest making "ThinkCode.TV is the product of a very ambitious idea by three programmers with a deeply rooted passion for programming, the open source movement, and education." -> We are three programmers with a deeply rooted passion for programming, the open source movement, and education."
- acangiano 16y ago
  I changed that sentence, thanks. :)
anamax 16y ago
> but it's doesn't contain any bullshit either. Bullshit is useful - it's fertilizer. Your "about" starts out by wasting my time. "ThinkCode.TV is a project from ThinkCode Labs, Inc, a Canadian startup founded in 2009" Someone may care about Canada. Someone may care about 2009. (I doubt that there are many people who care about either one, but ....) However, no one cares about the relationship of ThinkCode.TV to ThinkCode Labs. (You're not Bell Labs.) Is your goal to get someone to care about ThinkCode.TV or about ThinkCode Labs? Pick one and dump the reference to the other. Then replace ". We are" with "," and ask yourself if your names are the most important thing that you want to get across. If not, that sentence is in the wrong place. Kill "deeply rooted", "strongly", "a viable business," ,and "in today’s ever-changing world". (That leaves an unnecessary comma.) Better yet, rewrite that sentence so it highlights your customer's needs and not your beliefs. (They only care about your beliefs so far as those beliefs have some relationship to them getting what they want.) And, when you do, remember that modifiers are like knots - they weaken. Yes, even the emphatic ones. What's your highest priority? If it's not customer service, don't use the word priority in the last paragraph. (If it is, what does that say about your product?) Kill the first and last sentences in that paragraph and rewrite the middle one. The contact form is too cute. Is it better than a e-mail link/address? "screencast" should be "screencasts"
- kragen 16y ago
  > Someone may care about Canada. Well, for some reason I was thinking acangiano was here in Argentina, so I do care.

Good points. This is our about: http://thinkcode.tv/about http://thinkcode.tv/about. It's not exactly "how you doin'", but it's doesn't contain any bullshit either. What do you think?

aw3c2 16y ago

Your sentences are too long for me to be easily scanned. Also I would suggest making "ThinkCode.TV is the product of a very ambitious idea by three programmers with a deeply rooted passion for programming, the open source movement, and education." -> We are three programmers with a deeply rooted passion for programming, the open source movement, and education."

acangiano 16y ago
I changed that sentence, thanks. :)

anamax 16y ago

> but it's doesn't contain any bullshit either. Bullshit is useful - it's fertilizer. Your "about" starts out by wasting my time. "ThinkCode.TV is a project from ThinkCode Labs, Inc, a Canadian startup founded in 2009" Someone may care about Canada. Someone may care about 2009. (I doubt that there are many people who care about either one, but ....) However, no one cares about the relationship of ThinkCode.TV to ThinkCode Labs. (You're not Bell Labs.) Is your goal to get someone to care about ThinkCode.TV or about ThinkCode Labs? Pick one and dump the reference to the other. Then replace ". We are" with "," and ask yourself if your names are the most important thing that you want to get across. If not, that sentence is in the wrong place. Kill "deeply rooted", "strongly", "a viable business," ,and "in today’s ever-changing world". (That leaves an unnecessary comma.) Better yet, rewrite that sentence so it highlights your customer's needs and not your beliefs. (They only care about your beliefs so far as those beliefs have some relationship to them getting what they want.) And, when you do, remember that modifiers are like knots - they weaken. Yes, even the emphatic ones. What's your highest priority? If it's not customer service, don't use the word priority in the last paragraph. (If it is, what does that say about your product?) Kill the first and last sentences in that paragraph and rewrite the middle one. The contact form is too cute. Is it better than a e-mail link/address? "screencast" should be "screencasts"

kragen 16y ago
> Someone may care about Canada. Well, for some reason I was thinking acangiano was here in Argentina, so I do care.