I liked the way you drive the story, it feels really natural. If you want one advice, don't stop writing/reading. The second advice I could give you is: dont ma

I liked the way you drive the story, it feels really natural. If you want one advice, don't stop writing/reading. The second advice I could give you is: dont make boring shorts. People want dystopias and black stuff if it is about tech. Try to get the reader to the point in which he cant stop reading. Good luck in your journey.