The only real glaring mistake I noticed was the usage of "it's". "it's" is used in almost all cases for "it is" "It's a beautiful day outside" If you wan

The only real glaring mistake I noticed was the usage of "it's". "it's" is used in almost all cases for "it is" "It's a beautiful day outside" If you want to show possession, you use "its" "Apple showed off its Iphone 4.0 update today" Don't worry, native english speakers get this wrong all the time too.