I agree your translation is a lot closer to the original text, the original for example talks about a 'solitary meeting' with the ship, it does not say like in

I agree your translation is a lot closer to the original text, the original for example talks about a 'solitary meeting' with the ship, it does not say like in the translators' that the character got there alone, they could have gotten there with others and left them to wait for the boat alone for all the reader knows. As much as the sentence in the article is quite nice, it seems more of a reinterpretation of the original compared to an exact translation like yours.