>However, I think I’ve found my unfair advantage; it’s my ability to tell stories. Given that your thesis is 7 paragraphs in, you might want to rewrite this st

>However, I think I’ve found my unfair advantage; it’s my ability to tell stories. Given that your thesis is 7 paragraphs in, you might want to rewrite this story a bit, I almost gave up reading what your unfair advantage was - there was a lot of time spent in the article talking about things your reader may not be familiar with, and really those are not details we need before you tell the story of what your advantage is. If your advantage truly is telling stories, make sure to tell me a story :)