The other one I noticed is the closing paragraph: "The car is at the very center of many Americans [sic] lives. It can be a necessity, passion and a way to est

The other one I noticed is the closing paragraph: "The car is at the very center of many Americans [sic] lives. It can be a necessity, passion and a way to establish identity. As the number of car choices has increased, the car makeup of American cities have [sic] become vastly different. People in the Midwest are more likely to choose powerful American cars, while people on the coast are more likely to go for foreign, energy efficiency [sic] ones. Increased choice has unveiled the distinct character of American automotive desires." It reads like a by-the-numbers high school essay. Tell them what you're going to tell them, tell them, tell them what you told them. Sprinkle in outright errors, failures of parallelism, passive voice, and wordiness (...are more likely to...are more likely to...). The rote approach combined with the anodyne results put this reader to sleep.