The "watching" app sounds very cool. You should add a link to a demo or some other way to learn more about how it works. I have to say, though, that you lost

The "watching" app sounds very cool. You should add a link to a demo or some other way to learn more about how it works. I have to say, though, that you lost me with your last paragraph. First, it has many grammatical issues, including a run-on second sentence and an impressive butchering of the spelling of "businesses" as "buiessnesses." Second, it's ridiculous to claim that you could "very soon" be automating hundreds of billions of dollars in transactions. It's good to be ambitious, but you do have to be at least somewhat realistic. Third, you don't need to tout the merits of automation (especially in the overly casual way that you do). Instead, you could conclude with something that makes us believe that your company is the one to do it.