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Please don't take the previous advice uncritically. A good few of the suggested commas are jarring. I thought your text read very well.
by kybernetikos 11y ago
Please don't take the previous advice uncritically. A good few of the suggested commas are jarring. I thought your text read very well.
- jacquesm 11y agoI'm open to further corrections, how would you write that sentence? (I did the best I could on the original, if I could have done better I would have but punctuation is hard (and quotes are the hardest, for some reason)).
- StavrosK 11y agoThe suggested commas are jarring because the sentence is jarring. If I could rewrite the entire sentence, it would be more like this: > what bothers me is that, in many of these cases, the company is much sicker than it has to be. The wounds are largely self-inflicted, and the company might have survived if only someone had had the presence of mind to change direction when it was still possible.